So many things I liked, though Gibbs' tingling hand has to be my favourite here, I think. Also, the resolution regarding Jake. Though I think Tony was a bit hard on himself - true, he humiliated Jake, but J. ignored his safeword first, so yeah...
Which reminds me...I can't quite put my finger on the why, but this - “Hmmm, which one of us does that make the whore now, Jake?” - sounds a bit off on the style level. Maybe a bit stilted, I think, not like speech. Er. Yes. On the whole, FC reads very fluid and compact, though. :) ♥
*loves*
Gotta stop, there's a new NCIS ep up in 5 minutes. :D *runs*
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ninetydegrees
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on Mar. 21st, 2010 07:08 pm (UTC)*sqeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee*
*insert incoherent rambling*
Ahem.
So many things I liked, though Gibbs' tingling hand has to be my favourite here, I think. Also, the resolution regarding Jake. Though I think Tony was a bit hard on himself - true, he humiliated Jake, but J. ignored his safeword first, so yeah...
Which reminds me...I can't quite put my finger on the why, but this - “Hmmm, which one of us does that make the whore now, Jake?” - sounds a bit off on the style level. Maybe a bit stilted, I think, not like speech. Er. Yes. On the whole, FC reads very fluid and compact, though. :) ♥
*loves*
Gotta stop, there's a new NCIS ep up in 5 minutes. :D *runs*