See? I told you Tony was going to get himself hurt and Ducky was going to have to patch him back up and ... oh. Dammit. Why did you make me right????? ***gibbsslap!elevator***
"He missed sleeping in bondage, with Gibbs's arm wrapped around him." Yeah. Scared, happy and safe, Tony, get it????
"It might be painful, and he knew he wouldn't like it, but if Gibbs hadn't given up on him then he wasn't ready to give up on himself. " Now here's a line nobody picked up on yet. Even Tony...(cough cough gasp)
"He seemed to know how to reach straight into Tony's guilt and twist it to his own needs." Insert any name for "Tony" and there you have the meaning of all personal struggles, do you not?
So Gibbs, change the word in the above statement to "mould" errrr "mold" errr "shape" there we go. Shape it to your needs and to Tony's needs.
(Do you notice all my comments today are to your characters? I keep smacking them around and my hand is getting sore!)
OK - way too serious here but you have me in ANGST mode on a Saturday! (shakes self like wet dog) The sun is shining. the birds are chirping, the crickets were calling (when I started reading in the dark this morning) and I have a house to clean! oh. bummed again...
I stll say Monday is going to be so boring. Wait - there's still time: if you start writing now you will have three MORE chapters done by Monday!!!! YOU GO GIRL!!!
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Scared. Happy. Safe...
on Oct. 17th, 2009 03:16 pm (UTC)"He missed sleeping in bondage, with Gibbs's arm wrapped around him." Yeah. Scared, happy and safe, Tony, get it????
"It might be painful, and he knew he wouldn't like it, but if Gibbs hadn't given up on him then he wasn't ready to give up on himself. " Now here's a line nobody picked up on yet. Even Tony...(cough cough gasp)
"He seemed to know how to reach straight into Tony's guilt and twist it to his own needs." Insert any name for "Tony" and there you have the meaning of all personal struggles, do you not?
So Gibbs, change the word in the above statement to "mould" errrr "mold" errr "shape" there we go. Shape it to your needs and to Tony's needs.
(Do you notice all my comments today are to your characters? I keep smacking them around and my hand is getting sore!)
OK - way too serious here but you have me in ANGST mode on a Saturday! (shakes self like wet dog) The sun is shining. the birds are chirping, the crickets were calling (when I started reading in the dark this morning) and I have a house to clean! oh. bummed again...
I stll say Monday is going to be so boring. Wait - there's still time: if you start writing now you will have three MORE chapters done by Monday!!!! YOU GO GIRL!!!