Just some moments I had while reading the chappies. Apart from GHU during sexscenes^^
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Just some moments I had while reading the chappies. Apart from GHU during sexscenes^^
<<He kissed his sub's shoulder. "Love you too, Tony," he muttered.
He was glad that Tony wasn't awake, so he couldn't hear how paltry the words sounded.>>
Maybe it would have sounded paltry, you big stupid dom, but me thinks your sub would need to hear it -.- 4 wifes, 2 ex-subs and you don’t know that when your partner says he loves you and you do too it would be reassuring for him to hear you say the words? HOW STUPID CAN YOU GET ?!?
<<Tony clicked on the 'delete' button. Five weeks – that was a long time. He'd figure out a way to deal with it by then.>> Idiot meet idiot. That printing out and showing idea? Would have been of the good. Oh boys, it’s like the deaf leading the blind.
But all these hiccups make your fic that compelling because, hey, even if it is a big soap opera, the toned down version of these problems are things the readers experienced in RL and we feel with the characters. Just a little bit.
<<"No - I think you wanted my attention, and you were afraid you weren't gonna get it now we're back at work, so you engineered it so that you would. >> <<…>><<"Yeah. You do." Gibbs got up. "And for what it's worth – you *have* my attention, Tony. 24/7 remember? It works both ways.">> The whole conversation was a high point of the reading experience. Sex seems to be fairly simple to them but that? For me it went deeper than Gibbs cock up Tony’s pert little derriere.
<<"You can't wear the collar to work – but I don't see any reason why you can't wear this key.">> YEAH!!! *happy dance* The idiot bar just went down a big notch.
The sexparts were so hot and steamy but *wrinkles her nose* I will come back and re-read them when I need something seriously hot but I will read the conversations the two have a lot more often because that is what keeps me hooked. *embarrassed* Does that make sense?
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<<He kissed his sub's shoulder. "Love you too, Tony," he muttered.
He was glad that Tony wasn't awake, so he couldn't hear how paltry the words sounded.>>
Maybe it would have sounded paltry, you big stupid dom, but me thinks your sub would need to hear it -.- 4 wifes, 2 ex-subs and you don’t know that when your partner says he loves you and you do too it would be reassuring for him to hear you say the words? HOW STUPID CAN YOU GET ?!?
<<Tony clicked on the 'delete' button. Five weeks – that was a long time. He'd figure out a way to deal with it by then.>> Idiot meet idiot. That printing out and showing idea? Would have been of the good. Oh boys, it’s like the deaf leading the blind.
But all these hiccups make your fic that compelling because, hey, even if it is a big soap opera, the toned down version of these problems are things the readers experienced in RL and we feel with the characters. Just a little bit.
<<"No - I think you wanted my attention, and you were afraid you weren't gonna get it now we're back at work, so you engineered it so that you would. >> <<…>><<"Yeah. You do." Gibbs got up. "And for what it's worth – you *have* my attention, Tony. 24/7 remember? It works both ways.">> The whole conversation was a high point of the reading experience. Sex seems to be fairly simple to them but that? For me it went deeper than Gibbs cock up Tony’s pert little derriere.
<<"You can't wear the collar to work – but I don't see any reason why you can't wear this key.">> YEAH!!! *happy dance* The idiot bar just went down a big notch.
The sexparts were so hot and steamy but *wrinkles her nose* I will come back and re-read them when I need something seriously hot but I will read the conversations the two have a lot more often because that is what keeps me hooked. *embarrassed* Does that make sense?