Also...your style has really, really improved since The General and Dr Sheppard. That was a good story, and all, but the dialogue in this is a lot more consistently natural, and the overall flow is better. The transitions are smoother, and (this is also an aspect of it only being about one universe) the overall feel is much more cohesive.
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Also? I want it to be tomorrow NOW!
So good. So very, very good.
Also...your style has really, really improved since The General and Dr Sheppard. That was a good story, and all, but the dialogue in this is a lot more consistently natural, and the overall flow is better. The transitions are smoother, and (this is also an aspect of it only being about one universe) the overall feel is much more cohesive.